Decided to write a haiku!



MY HAIKU



I read a play a while ago called Haiku by Katherine Snodgrass and thought it was very detailed and interesting piece of work (a recommended read DEFINITELY). It's a truly wonderful play about the connections of female family members and the haiku's in it are great :)

Anyway, this is what I wrote (not even sure if it's a proper Haiku)


I’ve seen dogs lick tears
and the beggar man believe
On the bitter nights

What to learn how to write one?
^ follow this link, come on have a go ;)

Cloud Nine

This poem is one I wrote a while ago, I'm not sure what brought it on...
Anyway, critical comments are appreciated and I would love to hear what people think!
So without further ado, here is Cloud Nine

Cloud Nine

Haze

 stroke withdrawn cheeks

I wish to feel your depth,

suppleness of your nonentity in my

Clammed, sticky palms

Oh and how you look tonight

You knew it was an occasion to be remembered

To be hallowed

Heads will roll, to undergo

that essence of baptism

Once upon the hours of owls

 Held out a dove

And gave me a slice of

Cloud nine,

Which is what was, and now is mine.

Nightfall has a frayed black halo,

these echoes shall ring through horns

With remembrance, bound upon spite

In Twilight - I shall mourn.